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in the future nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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There is a notion that hard
copy
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 of
books
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 and
newspaper
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 will not be available in the future,
due to
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 the fact that
people
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 will be able to read these documents
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internet
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 for free. There is some basis for
this
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 belief,
however
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, I think it will not be the case entirely. Because
people
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 will pay for something if they want to read it
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 their own volition, on top of that, the algorithm to protect piracy is becoming stronger.
People
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appriciate
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appreciate
 an artisan when they realise how hard that person worked. They value the services the artist provides. There
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 multiple
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for
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 that,
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 as a gamer
receive
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donation
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donations
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 via payment methods
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,
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 youtube super chat
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 live streaming. Writing a book or publishing a newspaper is a lot of work.
May be
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 in
future
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the future
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 hard copies will be replaced by online
edition
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editions
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,
payment
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and payment
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method
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 will be changed to online currencies, but
people
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 will be willing to pay for a service they enjoy.
On the other hand
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, piracy has been a big concern for creative industries from the inception of
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internet
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. But the technology has improved significantly since. Google has developed algorithms to detect and decrease
traffics
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 to websites containing pirated
contents
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content
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. Other
technology based
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 companies, who
sales
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 online
edition
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editions
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 of
books
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,
also
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 flag pirated
contents
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.
To conclude
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, some
people
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 believe
books
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 will be obsolete in future as these will be available
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online for no cost. But I think these industries will go through evolution to transform how
people
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 consume
books
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newpapers
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newspapers
,
as well as
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payments
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 methods to survive.
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task achievement
Your introduction clearly addresses the task, but try to refine your thesis statement for greater clarity. You could explicitly mention both sides of the argument before giving your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay is generally coherent, but further improvements can be made. Focus on more seamless transitions between ideas and paragraphs. Topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph could guide the reader better.
task achievement
Your points are solid but need more specific examples. For instance, mentioning specific technologies or companies would strengthen your argument about advancements in piracy protection.
task achievement
You have successfully provided a balanced view, acknowledging the potential for online content replacing physical copies while also highlighting consumer willingness to pay for quality and better piracy protection.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, and your essay comes full circle, summarizing your main argument effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital content
  • Environmental concerns
  • Tactile experience
  • Production costs
  • Distribution costs
  • Digital divide
  • Digital fatigue
  • Print media
  • Credibility
  • Permanence
  • Collectibility
  • Aesthetic value
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