Today, more and more people are waiting until their thirties to get married and have children. Do you think it is a positive or negative trend?
Marriage is a significant
life
decision in an individual's life
irrespective of gender. What is the right age
to get married is always a never-ending question. In this
essay, we will discuss people
waiting until their thirties to get married and have children, is this
a positive trend to be followed or not?
To begin
with, Everybody's life
is different. Some people
will get settled in their early 20's some might be in their late 40's. We can't
say which one
is right or wrong! Nowadays people
are waiting for their thirties to have a family life
. I don't
think it's a wise choice. A recent study on delayed pregnancy among youngsters conducted by the Hospital of Maxcare proved that ageing affects the fertility of women as well as
healthy sperm in men. If we are focusing on maturity enhanced with age
, therefore
30 is the right age
to get married may not result in a productive outcome.
On the other hand
, there is a saying that maturity comes with experience. I agree with this
to a certain extent. A couple interested in getting married in their 20s seems to be a thoughtless decision for 80's and 70's people
. One
reason for this
is they are prone to divorces. For instance
, a survey conducted by the University of Calicut proved that people
marrying in their 30s show a discernible difference in lower divorce rates. As age
increases, both men and women start to accept their partner's life
and circumstances, how they
grow up? and treat their partner as an individual to develop a healthy relationship between them.
In conclusion, It is Add a missing verb
do they
one
's perspective that decides what age
should he/she get married and have children. Age
doesn't
go hand-in-hand with maturity but experience does. If a person is well settled and ready to get married doesn't
have to wait to attain the age
of 30. However
, one
shouldn't
push a person to have a married life
until he or she is willing to do so. In my opinion, I don't
think, neither it is a positive nor it is a negative trend.Submitted by praneeth2094 on
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While your essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic, ensure that you maintain a formal tone throughout and avoid using conversational language like 'To begin with' and 'On the other hand.'
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It's essential to avoid vague statements. Phrases like 'I don't think it's a wise choice' should be accompanied by more detailed reasoning and evidence.
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Your paragraphs should be logically structured, with each paragraph focusing on one main idea. Try to ensure smoother transitions between paragraphs to improve overall cohesion and coherence.
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Your essay would benefit from stronger topic sentences that clearly state the main idea of each paragraph. This will help guide the reader more effectively.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear and structured introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your argument well.
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The use of relevant examples, such as statistics from studies, strengthens your argument and demonstrates an effort to substantiate your points.
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You have addressed both sides of the argument, acknowledging that the decision to marry and have children is subjective and depends on personal circumstances.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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