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The maps below show recent changes in town of Kimsvile. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show recent changes in town of Kimsvile. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps illustrate the development of
town
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the town
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 of Kimsvile in 2002 and now.
Overall
,it can be seen clearly that at
the
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present, there are fewer trees than
2002
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in 2002
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.
Additionally
, there are more facilities for
entertainments
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entertainment
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Begining
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Beginning
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 with the top of town, where the new apartments are added to replace the left-hand tree
while
 the shopping centre is not changed.
In addition
, the factory
isremoved
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removed
 and the software
is
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was
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 constructed after
that
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apply
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20 years
whereas
the
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today town
have
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new
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a new
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 train station
although
 it
was
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had
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 not appeared before. Turning to the bottom of
maps
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the maps
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, the left-hand tree is replaced by
football
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a football
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 stadium now and the old cinema
is
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has been
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 rebuilt
to
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into
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the
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a
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 modern one ,
pub
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a pub
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.
By contrast
, the city centre in the middle of maps is still kept from 2002 to now
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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