The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession.

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The chart delineates the

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salaries of

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careers in the UK. Meanwhile, the table illustrates the average working

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per week.

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, all occupations' initial salaries increased after 3

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and underground drivers had the highest income

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they had the most trivial number of working.

Teacher

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and

Firefighter

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took up the first rank in the average working

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the teacher and firefighter worked the same amount of time at 55 which was the highest data in the table, they had a far cry regarding the income.

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the former salary

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considerably from about 31000 to around 35000, only 40000 of the latter increased significantly to about 43000 after 3

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, despite devoting only 36

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, the underground driver earned the most remarkable income which was 50000 at the beginning and about 51000 in

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subsequent 3

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, nurses who worked 38

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had the least purchased money which was around 15000 at the beginning and just under 20000 after 3

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, policemen whose salary remained around 21000 unchanged after 3

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dedicated 40

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of working per week.

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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

187 words

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Some people say that the government should invest in trains and subway system to prevent traffic congestion in large cities. Others, however, think it should build wider roads. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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