Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more importnant environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is indeed true that in
recent
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era
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because of global environmental issues flora and fauna
gets
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affected widely. There are multifactors which
affecting
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the
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nature mostly in various ways
such
as
loss
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the loss
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of
imporatant
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important
natural
resaources
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resources
as well. In
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will elaborate
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opinon
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opinion
on
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we are not just
loosing
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losing
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only herbs and animals but
lot
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a lot
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of other natural
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as well.
Majority
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of people
believes
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that the
recent
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most important concern is
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the lost
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lost
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of essential herbs.
Due to
global
warming
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thare
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there
were several forest
fire
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fires
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occured
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occurred
in many
counties
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countries
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.
firstly
, trees are not just
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a source
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of exchanging oxygen and co2 cycle but it has
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impact on providing sustainable sources in
health
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the health
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industry and
bussiness
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business
sectors in wooden furniture or
in
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paper
industies
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industries
.
secondly
,
natural
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the natural
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life cycle
is depends
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upon
extinction
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the extinction
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of
animal
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animals
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.
Also
,
wast
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waste
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society
is relies
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relies
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on animal production
such
as
maily
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mainly
part of
food
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the food
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.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, the current global issues
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global warming,
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the emmision
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emmision
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emission
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of
corbon
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carbon
dioxide and other fatal gases in
air
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the air
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which produce tremendous
health related
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conditons
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conditions
in humans.
Bacuse
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Because
of that there are
prodution
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production
of heatwaves and glacier
snowmountains
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snow mountains
snow-mountains
are melting which has devasted
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in
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the exntiction
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exntiction
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extinction
of snow animals.
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, there
are
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risen
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concern about less rain and burning heat
certain
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in certain
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parts of the world
due to
changes in
envirnmental
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environmental
effects. I highly
belive
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believe
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there should be more effective and
alterative
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alternative
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solution
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solutions
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on
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global warming concerns as it is the
rootcause
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root cause
of all weather and
global related
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problems. Apart from that,
goverments
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governments
government
and even mankind
needs
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to think about
to save
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saving
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natural
resouces
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resources
first and so on
thats
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that's
that
how we will protect other
impotant
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important
forest species.
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