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The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countriesSummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countriesSummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart
ilustrates
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illustrates
 three different
activites
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activities
 that
students
ini
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in
 United Kingdom, Japan, and Germany are doing during the weekdays.
Overall
, the
students
 spend about eight
hours
 of their time
to study
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studying
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, and
obout
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about
 seven
hours
 for relaxing. They
also
use
minimum
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a minimum
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seven
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of seven
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hours
 to sleep. But not like any other countries,
students
 in
UK
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the UK
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 prefer to
use
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spend
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 most of their time
to sleep
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sleeping
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 rather than
for
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apply
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studying or relaxing. The
students
also
 choose to put relaxing in the 3rd
priorities
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priority
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 during weekdays. In
UK
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the UK
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,
students
are tend
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tend
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 to
use
 their weekdays
in balance
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for balanced
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activites
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activities
. They sleep and study for about eight
hours
 and relax for seven
hours
.
While
students
 in Japan have a very big gap between those three
activites
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activities
. They prefer
study
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to study
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 for more than 12
hours
 in a day, which is very
extrem
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extreme
, and only
use
 four
hours
 to relax.
In
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other
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the other
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 side,
students
 in Germany
use
Verb problem
spend
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 most of their time
to sleep
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sleeping
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 and
relax
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relaxing
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, but
also
 keep studying for nine
ours
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hours
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in
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apply
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a day.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, hours, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • typical weekday
  • students
  • academic activities
  • leisure activities
  • rest
  • time spent
  • comparison
  • sleep patterns
  • cultural differences
  • educational system
  • commuting
  • variations
  • schedule
  • highlighting
  • differences
  • similarities
  • anomalies
  • amount of time
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