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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The table provides data about expenditures
on
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in
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 several categories in five locations in the world in 2002.
First,
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Turkey
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 was the country with the highest level of
consumptions
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consumption
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while
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the
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apply
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Sweden
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 was the lowest. In terms of food and
bevearge
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beverage
beverages
 and tobacco,
Turkey
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 accounted for 32.14, followed by Ireland with 28.91%,
while
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Sweden
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 showed around half, 15.77% only.
Second,
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in terms of clothing and footwear, Italy was
on
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in
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the
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apply
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first place with 9%, almost twice
compared
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as much
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to
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as
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the
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apply
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Sweden
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 (5.4%),
while
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 the rest of the countries were around 6.5%.
Finaly
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Finally
, in
Turkey
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 the expenditures on leisure and education were 4.35%, followed by
Sweden
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 and Italy with
rougly
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roughly
 3.2%,
while
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 Spain
showen
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showed
 less than 2% only.
Overall
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, comparing different countries and categories, in
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Turkey
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Turkey,
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 people
were
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apply
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spent the most and in
Sweden
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 the
less
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least
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,
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however
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however,
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Sweden
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's expenditures on leisure and education were among the highest and in
clothing
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the clothing
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 and footwear category Italy
overpass
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overpassed
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the
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Turkey
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words turkey, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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