The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
The table provides data about expenditures
on
several categories in five locations in the world in 2002.
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in
First,
Turkey
was the country with the highest level of consumptions
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consumption
while
the
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apply
Sweden
was the lowest.
In terms of food and bevearge
and tobacco, Correct your spelling
beverage
beverages
Turkey
accounted for 32.14, followed by Ireland with 28.91%, while
Sweden
showed around half, 15.77% only.
Second,
in terms of clothing and footwear, Italy was on
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in
the
first place with 9%, almost twice Correct article usage
apply
compared
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as much
to
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as
the
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apply
Sweden
(5.4%), while
the rest of the countries were around 6.5%.
Finaly
, in Correct your spelling
Finally
Turkey
the expenditures on leisure and education were 4.35%, followed by Sweden
and Italy with rougly
3.2%, Correct your spelling
roughly
while
Spain showen
less than 2% only.
Correct your spelling
showed
Overall
, comparing different countries and categories, in Turkey
people Add a comma
Turkey,
were
spent the most and in Unnecessary verb
apply
Sweden
the less
, Replace the word
least
however
Add the comma(s)
however,
Sweden
's expenditures on leisure and education were among the highest and in clothing
and footwear category Italy Correct article usage
the clothing
overpass
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overpassed
the
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apply
Turkey
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