Every year several language die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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task achievement
You need to provide a more comprehensive and clear introduction. State your position clearly and outline the main points you will discuss in your essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the paragraph has a clear topic sentence and supporting details. The current paragraph is not fully developed and lacks coherence.
task achievement
Provide relevant examples to support your arguments. For instance, mention specific cases where fewer languages have facilitated better communication.
task achievement
You have attempted to address the topic and have stated your agreement with the notion that fewer languages make communication easier.
coherence cohesion
Your intent to explain and provide points is evident, which is essential for structure and coherence.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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