The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity us used in an average English home.

The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity us used in an average English home.
The given charts provide information about how much electrical
power
(unit) is used in England during twenty-four hours per day in periods of summer and winter,
along with
the proportion of
spending
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electricity
in
household
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households
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. As can be seen from the first line graph,
the
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significant amount of
power
is used in
cold
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period, rather than in summer.
Moreover
, half of the amount of
electricity
is used for heating the rooms and water.
To begin
with the first chart, the use of
electricity
units in the winter starts at around 35000 and
then
rises to 40000
in
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3:00 am. After that, its use decreases to under 30000 in 7:00 am and
then
grows dramatically to 40000 till 1 pm.
However
, electrical
power
oscillates between 13:00-18:00 pm after reaches a peak at just under 50000 in 21:00 pm. Despite
this
, it drops quickly after 9 pm to 35000,
similarly
to the usage rate in the beginning of the day.
According to
the second pie chart, a more than half of
power
is spent on heating rooms and water. For other household mod cons,
such
as ovens, kettle, washing machines,
power
usage makes up 17,5%. For other two categories consumption of
electricity
indicates 15%.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demand for electricity
  • typical days
  • line graph
  • seasonal variation
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • exceeds
  • units of electricity
  • distribution of electricity usage
  • heating
  • water heating
  • combined total
  • major uses
  • lighting
  • ovens
  • kettles
  • washing machines
  • miscellaneous appliances
  • electronics
  • total usage
  • account for
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