The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.
The bar chart provides data
of
Change preposition
on
avarage
house Correct your spelling
average
prices
in five different location
in the world from 1990 to 2002 and compares them to Change to a plural noun
locations
1989
level.
Correct article usage
the 1989
First,
the prices
rose in all the countries exclude
Frankfurt, Wrong verb form
excluding
Germany
. Correct word choice
and Germany
In
the Change preposition
At
begining
of the period, from 1990 to 1995, the housing Correct your spelling
beginning
prices
in New York and London were -5% and -7% respectively, however
, in next
six years they became positive, Correct article usage
the next
accounted
for 5% and 12% respectively.
Wrong verb form
accounting
Secondly
, Madrid and Frankfurt were countries, where the price level was positive during the all period. Compared between 1990-1995 and 1996-2002, in Spain the housing prices
doubled, however
in Germany halved.
Finally
, average price changes in Tokyo were negative from 1990 until 2002, although
from -7.5 in the first five years they uped
to -5%, and they still remained the only negative figures among the Correct your spelling
increased
location
shown in the chart.
Fix the agreement mistake
locations
Overall
, compare
with the average house Change the form of the verb
compared
prices
in 1989, during twelve-year
period from 1990 to 2002, in Add an article
the twelve-year
the
most of the cities Correct article usage
apply
the
housing became more expensive, Correct article usage
apply
exclude
Germany, where the Wrong verb form
excluding
prices
decreased, and only in Japan the percentage remained negative.Submitted by vikiregev on
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