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The diagrams illustrate the Central Library before and after innovation.

The diagrams illustrate the Central Library before and after innovation.
The diagrams illustrate the Central
Library
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 before and after innovation.
Overall
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, the
library
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 has been improved to include the necessary space for events, so it has a large space in the centre. Two decades ago, on the left
side
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 of the entrance there was a reading
room
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 with a lot of magazines and newspapers, and on the opposite
side
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 was the enquiry desk for tickets and returning
books
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. In the present, it has been replaced with a modern computer
room
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 on the left
side
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 and a café on the right
side
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. The adult fiction
books
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area
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 has moved to the right-hand
side
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 of the
library
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, and all reference
books
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 are on the left now. The adult non-fiction
books
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area
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 has been transferred to the self-service machine with the information desk. There was a
room
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 in the left corner of the Central
Library
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, or what can be known as the CDs, computer games, and videos
area
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,
as well as
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 in the right corner of the
room
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, which contained
books
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 for children only. Nowadays, the CDs, computer games, and videos
room
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 have been turned into an
area
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 where children can read and listen to their
favorite
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favourite
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 fiction stories; sometimes
this
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area
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 can be used to hold storytelling events. There is a lecture
room
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 in the present, which used to be the children’s
book only
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book-only
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 section.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, side, room, books, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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