You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year old child.Write a letter to the parents .In your letter -explain why would like the job -give details why you would be a suitable person to employ -say how you spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear Sir, I hope
this
letter finds you in good spirits. I am writing
this
letter to you regarding the advertisement shown in the newspaper for taking care of your child. Well, I think that I could be a perfect match for
this
job because I have passed
from
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college with the child care course with excellent grades. I have a cheerful nature,
thus
whenever I visit my
brothers
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brother's
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house their little ones really enjoy my company.
Furthermore
, I have worked as a nanny for 4 months during my placement at my college and I gained some beneficial practical experience as well.
Moreover
, my sister was in
hospital
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the hospital
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last
year for four months
due to
her surgery and her
six year
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six-year
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dauther
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daughter
was left with me to take care
.
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of.
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I am free during
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the evening
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evening
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and weekends after my studies
then
I usually go and enjoy the company of two 7 years kids of my house owner who just lives upstairs from me. They are
addorable
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adorable
and
loves
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love
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me a lot. I think
,
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apply
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I could be a good match for your requirement. I will be looking forward to
hear
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from you. Yours sincerely, Navneet
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coherence
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task achievement
Use more varied sentence structures and vocabulary to enhance the tone and make it more engaging for the reader.
task achievement
You have clearly covered all parts of the task, ensuring a complete response.
greeting and closing
The closing is polite and appropriately formal, which is suitable for this kind of letter.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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