You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year old child.Write a letter to the parents .In your letter -explain why would like the job -give details why you would be a suitable person to employ -say how you spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir, I hope

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letter finds you in good spirits. I am writing

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letter to you regarding the advertisement shown in the newspaper for taking care of your child. Well, I think that I could be a perfect match for

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job because I have passed

from

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apply

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college with the child care course with excellent grades. I have a cheerful nature,

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whenever I visit my

brothers

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brother's

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house their little ones really enjoy my company.

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, I have worked as a nanny for 4 months during my placement at my college and I gained some beneficial practical experience as well.

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, my sister was in

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the hospital

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last

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year for four months

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her surgery and her

six year

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dauther

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daughter

was left with me to take care

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of.

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I am free during

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the evening

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evening

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and weekends after my studies

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I usually go and enjoy the company of two 7 years kids of my house owner who just lives upstairs from me. They are

addorable

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adorable

and

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me a lot. I think

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apply

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I could be a good match for your requirement. I will be looking forward to

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from you. Yours sincerely, Navneet

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coherence

To improve coherence, work on creating more seamless transitions between paragraphs and ideas.

task achievement

Use more varied sentence structures and vocabulary to enhance the tone and make it more engaging for the reader.

task achievement

You have clearly covered all parts of the task, ensuring a complete response.

greeting and closing

The closing is polite and appropriately formal, which is suitable for this kind of letter.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

193 words

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caregiver
childcare experience
passion for children
responsibility
patience
commitment
cultural immersion
local environment
community engagement
flexibility
references
qualifications
volunteer work
educational background
suitable candidate
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positive impact
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