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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps show information about the changes in the
road
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 access to the hospital in the city between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, the
road
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 system experienced significant changes with more facilities.
In addition
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, the
road
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 access to the hospital was expanded with the addition of
bus
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 infrastructure, parking facilities and more roundabout In the north-east of the entrance
road
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, people constructed a new public car park near the Ring
Road
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.
Moreover
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, two roundabouts were built in the centre of the
road
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 system, which was connected by the hospital
road
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. As can be seen, there were two parking spaces for staff and six
bus
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 stops in the west and the east in 2007, it was a
bus
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 station and staff car park in 2010 respectively.
Furthermore
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, the
bus
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 station to the southwest of the City
Road
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 had two small linking roads to the roundabouts at the Ring
Road
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 and City
Road
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • improvements
  • facilitate
  • congestion
  • junctions
  • streamline
  • traffic flow
  • reduce congestion
  • public transport
  • bus station
  • efficiency
  • accessibility
  • parking facilities
  • car park
  • designated
  • alleviate
  • issues
  • adequate space
  • enhancements
  • overall accessibility
  • traffic management
  • convenience
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