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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

#internet #newspapers
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internet
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life ,you can not do anything
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with out
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internet
 ,you can not know what
happen
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another country and you can’t read
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internet
 ,in the past you
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 read newspapers but now you have it in your phone ,its sad to lose thing like papers but
this
 is the future ,in my
opinion
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 agree what future
need
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 and what technology want ,if you imagine if they no
internet
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acn
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can
 you call your friends or your family ,
its
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 so hard to imagine things like
this
 ,some times
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dont
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don't
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 spent too much time in the
internet
 and do nothing in my real life ,
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 spend more 8 hours in the week and in the weekend
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 spent more than 9 hours ,sometimes you should take
break
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internet
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 and read some book or walk few hours ,and actually everything come or becoming into the past ,just take a
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breath
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coherence cohesion
Work on structuring your essay by using clear paragraphs for the introduction, body, and conclusion. This will make your argument easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
Improve transitions between your ideas to enhance the flow of your essay. Use linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your points.
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Support your main points with more specific examples. For instance, you could mention specific ways the internet has made information more accessible.
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Focus on expressing your ideas more clearly and comprehensively. Consider elaborating on each point to add depth to your argument.
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Your essay addresses the topic and provides a relevant response, which is good for task achievement.
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You have shared some personal experiences and opinions, which make your essay more engaging and relatable.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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