The charts below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years

The charts below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years
Contained in the given bar chart is data related to the movie production of 5 different
nations
from 2007 to 2009.
Overall
, clearly perceived is how the
quantity
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of
movies
produced by all countries increased with the exception of
nations
A and D where they saw a slight decline.
Additionally
, even though the
films
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created
from
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country A experienced a decline in the
number
, it still remained
as
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the
nation
with the most
films
produced. With regards to the
nations
which made up a majority of
movies
produced ,accounting for more than 50
movies
in all years, A and B stood at approximately 98
as well as
about 49
films
, respectively. As for the
number
of
films
which
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produced by
nation
A, it remained stable for the first year before declining from 98 to under exactly 80
movies
.
By contrast
, the
quantity
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of
films
in
nations
witnessed a significant increase throughout the period, going up from nearly 49 to about 70
movies
,
however
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it is still less than
nation
A in the
number
of
films
produced
although
it increased gradually. Turning towards the remaining
nations
,
the
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film production in all three countries only saw a minority in the
number
of
movies
released.
While
the
films
produced by country C rose slowly between 9 and 19
films
,
nation
D saw a slight decrease in the quantity of that before having a small recovery. In terms of
nation
E,
although
it increased throughout the timeframe, the
number
of
movies
produced by
this
nation
was the least when compared to others.
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