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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
#show #percentages #meals #three #nutrients
The following pie charts illustrate the average percentages of three types of nutrients:
sodium
, saturated
fats
, and sugars, in typical meals consumed by Americans.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that dinner accounted for
largest
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the largest
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 proportion of
sodium
 and saturated
fats
,
whereas
that
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apply
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of
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apply
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snacks
is
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are
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 sugar.
However
, it is interesting to note that
peoples
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people
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 from the
states
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 eat salty and fatty food
in
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at
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 dinner more than
that
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apply
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of
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apply
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at lunch and breakfast, respectively.
To begin
 with, the proportion of the aforementioned nutrients found in
three
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the three
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 meals are similar except
snacks
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for snacks
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. the majority of nutrients in dinner are
sodium
 and
fats
 which
has
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have
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 the greatest percentages among the three meal courses at 43% and 37%,respectively.
Furthermore
, followed by that of
at
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a
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 lunch of less than 30%, whilst at breakfast is the fewest of not greater than 20%. In regards
with
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to
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,
americans
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Americans
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become
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have
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 a sweet tooth when it comes to
snacks
 at 42% which took the biggest ratio among
others
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other
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 meals.
However
, in terms of
fats
 in
snacks
 was only half of sugar and only 14% of
sodium
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, fats, snacks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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