The chart below shows the average hours spent per day in leisure and sports activities by youngest and oldest populations in the US in 2015.

The chart below shows the average hours spent per day in leisure and sports activities by youngest and  oldest populations in the US in 2015.
The bar chart depicts the median daily
hours
, spent by teenagers and elderly people in recreation and physical practices in the USA in 2015.
It is clear that
the most popular entertainment among both ageing groups is watching television programs,
although
this
rate for the eldest individuals is almost double on a daily basis. interestingly, both groups are benefiting from their relationships almost equally. Regarding activities that older ones are more desired, there are three different categories. They watch films much more than double in comparison with the young ones with 4.5
hours
and 2.4
hours
respectively.
this
feature for reading novels in eldest people are 5 times more than teenagers with 1 hour and only 0.2
hours
respectively.
finally
, older ones spent more time in solitary activities with 0.6
hours
daily. Turning to youngster's favourite actions, they are more likely to be a part of hobbies and activities. they use their laptops for gaming purposes and
also
they are fond of physical health improvement acts these practices take approximately 1.7
hours
daily in comparison with older counterparts by 0.7
hours
collectively.
Finally
, both ageing levels use their time in conversation with their friends and other extended families nearly the same at 0.8 per day.
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