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Band 2

living in a country where you have to speak a foreigen language can cause seriouse social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #foreigen #language #seriouse
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As far as I`m
concern
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concerned
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, having some problems
such
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issue
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issues
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 and some
partical
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particular
 ones I believe that happens when you are living in
another countries
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another country
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 and you have to speak another language. I will list these problems that might
to
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apply
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happend
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happen
. Social matters can happen in all of the groups
people
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of people
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 who
imigrated
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emigrated
immigrated
migrated
 or are
tourist
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tourists
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.
These problem
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This problem
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 can be not
undrestandig
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understanding
understand
clear
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clearly
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 the culture of that country,
ran
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running
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 into some different
law
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laws
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 that are confusing
fore
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for
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 somebody or doing some wrong
acttivity
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activity
 that are not
exeptable
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acceptable
fore
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for
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 the peoples of that country which might
to
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apply
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seprate
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separate
 migrated
people
 from the citizens.
On the other hand
, there are some practical problems
could
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that could
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 make the
people
 who have
imigrated disapointed
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immigrated disappointed
, which means they
are not be
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are not
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 able to do the things
like
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apply
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that they want.
For example
, ordering
foods
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food
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, finding
house
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a house
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 and buying a car. These simple things could be so difficult by speaking
another languages
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another language
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 and
people
 always are
concern
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concerned
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 about scams. In conclusion,
people
 must have
a lots
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a lot
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 of
problem
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problems
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 with their
imigration witthout
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immigration without
 knowing
languages
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the languages
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as well as
 their
mothers
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mother's
mothers'
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task achievement
It's important to clearly state your position in the introduction. Begin with a clear thesis statement that specifically addresses whether you agree or disagree with the statement.
task achievement
Your main points need more development and support. Use specific examples and detailed explanations to reinforce your arguments more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving cohesion by using linking words and phrases to connect your ideas smoothly. This will make your essay easier to follow and understand.
coherence cohesion
Be careful with grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors. Proofread your work to catch and correct errors such as 'imigrated' instead of 'immigrated', and 'undrestandig' instead of 'understanding'.
task achievement
Your essay addresses both social and practical problems, which shows a comprehensive understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
You outline multiple reasons why speaking a foreign language might cause difficulties, indicating a clear focus.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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