Some people say that it is necessary to possess talent to become a successful sportsperson. Others, however, believe that hard work and practice are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Although
, its
argued that being a sportsperson takes a lot of time and effort Correct your spelling
it's
due to
the hard work. I agree that its
an important talent a person must have because of its huge Replace the word
it's
it is
advanatages
Correct your spelling
advantages
on
individuals.
All the well-known Change preposition
for
sports men
and women spent 30 years of their lives Correct your spelling
sportsmen
trainig
very hard, eating healthy, Correct your spelling
training
trying
sleeping
well. Correct word choice
and sleeping
This
is to say that being a commitment
person to a strict healthy Replace the word
committed
lifestyile requiers
a higher level of Correct your spelling
lifestyle requires
motiviation
and strength in order to follow it. Many Correct your spelling
motivation
people
find following a healthy diet and going to the gym is quite difficult to
them, and the main reason for Change preposition
for
that is
society members are not being aware enough of sport
hoppies importance and impact on them. For example
, a recent study aimed to increase the awareness of sports
among members shows that only 55% of local people
possess a sport
talent.
Change the noun form
sports
People
who have a daily workout such
as boxig
, lifting Correct your spelling
boxing
wights
, basketball, and football Correct your spelling
weights
enjoys
a lot Correct subject-verb agreement
enjoy
o
positive impact on their lives. Change preposition
of
In addition
to that, they will have a lower chance to get
heart Change preposition
of getting
diseases
so simply they will live longer than others. Fix the agreement mistake
disease
As well as
, possessing a Rephrase
Also
sport
Fix the agreement mistake
sports
hoppy
is linked Correct your spelling
hobby
dierctly
to mental health, Correct your spelling
directly
In other words
, a sportsperson is able to protects
Change the verb
protect
him\her self
from mental issues Correct your spelling
himself/herself
such
as depreission
, Correct your spelling
depression
Correct word choice
and anxeity
anxeity
by only Correct your spelling
anxiety
excssersing
in Correct your spelling
exercising
regular
manner. Change the article
a regular
Therefore
, I agree that sports
should be part of everyone
lives.
Change noun form
everyone's
To conclude
, many people
believe that being a sports
lover is not easy because they are not considering its value. I believe that sport
skills are a must Change the noun form
sports
due to
its
great benefits Correct pronoun usage
their
on
members.Change preposition
for
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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly introduces both views you will discuss. Try starting with a general statement about the topic before presenting the specific views.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving grammatical accuracy, such as correct use of tenses, articles, and punctuation.
coherence cohesion
Vary your sentence structures to make your writing more engaging and easier to follow.
task achievement
Provide a clear and balanced discussion of both views. Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.
task achievement
You did well to include examples and points that support your perspective.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a conclusion that summarizes your main argument.
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