Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, either to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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It is argued that high
school
students
should take a
gap
year
before
university
.
This
essay will discuss the benefits a person can enjoy in
this
situation, and entering
university
late
as
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is
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one
of the
drowbacks
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drawbacks
.
One
of the main advantages, taking a break before
university
allows the student
enjoying
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the free time, which can be invested in many plans.
This
is to say, a person can
spent
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spend
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one
year
in
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discovering
himseflf\herself
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himself
.
In other words
, travelling and experiencing new things
as well as
by
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reading more about various aspects of life.
For example
, most of the
students
in
thier
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their
last
year
of
school
are
vary
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very
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counfused
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confused
and worried about selecting
university
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a university
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major, taking a
gap
year
will help them being able to gain enough knowledge
in
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about
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which aspects of life
seems
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seem
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interesting to them. As
result
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a result
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, the
studenst
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students
student
will be able to know themselves very well and can determine which major of
university
to select easily.
On the other hand
,
one
of the disadvantages is the
student
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student's
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fear of being late for starting
colloage
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collage
college
. Skipping
one
year
of a
person
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person's
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study plan seems scary for most
of
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people. They believe that
this
gap
year
will
be finish
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be finished
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with nothing and they
scared
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are scared
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of being unable to get
use
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used
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of
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to
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it.
Therefore
,
students
tend to start studying as soon as they finish high
school
.
For example
, when
i
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I
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advised my little sister to take a break after
school
, she refused to do so because she
believes
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believed
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that
one
year
is
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was
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too long and it
will
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would
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be a waste of time.
To conclude
, having a
gap
year
will impact
students
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students'
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lives in
positive
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a positive
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way
due to
its great advantages.
However
,
students
become
worry
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worried
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about
thier
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their
future when they skip
one
year
and
be
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are
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late which is
consderied
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considered
one
of the disadvantages.
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task response
The essay addresses the topic and presents a clear position. However, there are occasional grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, which can affect readability. Work on refining sentence structures and enhancing grammatical accuracy.
coherence cohesion
The coherence and cohesion could be improved by better structuring the arguments and linking them more smoothly. Use of transition words could improve the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
task response
The essay presents a balanced discussion by addressing both advantages and disadvantages of taking a gap year, which demonstrates a well-rounded understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the essay, making the central theme clear to the reader.
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