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Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, either to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

It is argued that high
school
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students
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 should take a
gap
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year
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 before
university
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.
This
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 essay will discuss the benefits a person can enjoy in
this
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 situation, and entering
university
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 late
as
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is
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one
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 of the
drowbacks
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drawbacks
.
One
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 of the main advantages, taking a break before
university
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 allows the student
enjoying
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 the free time, which can be invested in many plans.
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 is to say, a person can
spent
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one
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year
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in
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discovering
himseflf\herself
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himself
.
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, travelling and experiencing new things
as well as
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by
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reading more about various aspects of life.
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, most of the
students
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 in
thier
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their
last
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year
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 of
school
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 are
vary
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very
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counfused
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confused
 and worried about selecting
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university
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a university
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 major, taking a
gap
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year
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 will help them being able to gain enough knowledge
in
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about
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 which aspects of life
seems
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seem
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 interesting to them. As
result
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a result
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, the
studenst
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students
student
 will be able to know themselves very well and can determine which major of
university
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 to select easily.
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,
one
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 of the disadvantages is the
student
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student's
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 fear of being late for starting
colloage
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collage
college
. Skipping
one
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year
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 of a
person
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 study plan seems scary for most
of
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people. They believe that
this
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gap
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year
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 will
be finish
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be finished
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 with nothing and they
scared
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are scared
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 of being unable to get
use
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used
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of
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to
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 it.
Therefore
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,
students
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 tend to start studying as soon as they finish high
school
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.
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, when
i
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I
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 advised my little sister to take a break after
school
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, she refused to do so because she
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 that
one
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year
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is
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 too long and it
will
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would
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 be a waste of time.
To conclude
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, having a
gap
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year
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 will impact
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students
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students'
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 lives in
positive
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a positive
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 way
due to
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 its great advantages.
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,
students
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 become
worry
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worried
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 about
thier
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their
 future when they skip
one
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year
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 and
be
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are
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 late which is
consderied
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considered
one
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 of the disadvantages.

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task response
The essay addresses the topic and presents a clear position. However, there are occasional grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, which can affect readability. Work on refining sentence structures and enhancing grammatical accuracy.
coherence cohesion
The coherence and cohesion could be improved by better structuring the arguments and linking them more smoothly. Use of transition words could improve the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
task response
The essay presents a balanced discussion by addressing both advantages and disadvantages of taking a gap year, which demonstrates a well-rounded understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the essay, making the central theme clear to the reader.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • real-world experience
  • personal growth
  • maturity
  • practical skills
  • CVs
  • future employment opportunities
  • broadening their horizons
  • cultural awareness
  • career goals
  • academic interests
  • academic momentum
  • rigors of study
  • financial strain
  • income source
  • personal development
  • achievements
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