In many countries, more and more choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?
In
this
modern era, there is a rise in people who are
prefer imported Unnecessary verb
apply
food
than
local Change preposition
to
food
, which derives from a current trending
. Replace the word
trend
However
, this
can be tacked by encourage
advertising of the local Change the verb form
encouraging
food
.
It is vital to understand that the increasing in
number of Wrong verb form
increased
food
that Fix the agreement mistake
foods
import
from Wrong verb form
are imported
the
foreign is Correct article usage
apply
due to
the trending
of Replace the word
trend
the
young people nowadays. There is no doubt that the young generation Correct article usage
apply
have
created many Change the verb form
has
trend
that have a negative effect Change to a plural noun
trends
to
their country, including the imported the imported Change preposition
on
food
trending
. Replace the word
trend
Consequently
, the
local Correct article usage
apply
food
cannot be sold to
anywhere, Change preposition
apply
create
Wrong verb form
creating
a
damage to the country’s economy. Remove the article
apply
For example
, there was an Australian apple trend that occurred in Vietnam, which lead
to the loss of Wrong verb form
led
apple’s
agriculture Change noun form
apple
in
several years.
Change preposition
for
However
, this
issue can be dealt by
encouraging more Change preposition
with by
about
local Change preposition
apply
food’s
Change noun form
food
advertisement
. It is evident that advertising is one of the most effective ways to gain people’s interest Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
to
local Change preposition
in
food
. Hence
, it is
Unnecessary verb
apply
also
push
the local Correct subject-verb agreement
pushes
food’s
economy Change noun form
food
outweighed
the foreign one. Change the verb form
to outweigh
For instance
, China had succeeded in making their products become popular among their people’s mind.
In conclusion, the situation of imported food
become
outweighed the local one Verb problem
apply
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
due to
the young generation’s trending
. Replace the word
trend
However
, this
problem can be solved by focuse
on advertising Correct your spelling
focusing
focus
the
local Correct article usage
apply
food
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Explanation
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Structure
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Examples
Provided a relevant example relating to Australia and Vietnam, which helps in illustrating the problem.
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