extinction of animals cause by habitat destruction and pollutants

Nevertheless
,
this
problem can be tackled by the
authority
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having strict laws towards industrial activities in enterprises.More specifically, the state can set a limit
in
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the extraction of
greenland
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and
besides
, frequently examine the wastewater treatment in factories.
For
this
reason, if there were any shortcomings in radically treating sewage before releasing it into the environment
coupled with
the overuse of
exploting
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exploiting
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green spaces, those must receive a monetary fine and a ban from continuing to go
in
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work for a time period. Vietnamese authority is a
revelant
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relevant
example, which without informing, found some factories skipping the waste purification, afterwards,
forces
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it to totally be closed down three years later and compensate for nearly five hundred
millions
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vietnam
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dong for
once
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violation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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