The chart below shows the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.

The chart below shows the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of
citizen
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citizens
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in European
country
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countries
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spend
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spent
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on different commodities and services between 1958 and 2008. Units are measured in
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per cent
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. In general, it can be observed that the proportion of people's total spending on
food
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in 1958 was the highest
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that of spending on housing was the highest in 2008. It is
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evident that
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spending on
food
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, clothing, and entertainment witnessed a decrease, a reverse pattern could be observed in the figures for the other categories. In 1958, the percentage of residents spending on
food
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was the highest at 32%. The figures for housing, clothing and entertainment were lower, at 22%. 18% and 13%, respectively, compared to 8% for travel and transport. Luxury goods,
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, accounted for the lowest value, at only 7%. In 2008, the proportion of the citizen's budget on
food
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experienced a notable fall to just 12%,
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there was a rise of precisely 32% in the data on housing.
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, 17% of the total money was paid for luxury goods
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travel and transportation. The period from 1958 to 2008 saw a significant decrease in the expenditure on clothing from 18% to only 16%, and
this
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way was higher than the final figure for entertainment, at 6% by 2008.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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