the chart below shows the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.
The pie chart
illustrate
the percentages of Change the verb form
illustrates
consuming
in six different services and commodities of European Replace the word
consumption
citizen
in two years. Units are measured in percentages.
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citizens
Overall
, it can be seen that the consumption of food is
the highest common in 1958 Wrong verb form
was
whereas
housing consumption is
the greatest in 2008. It can Wrong verb form
was
also
be observed that the spending in
entertainment and clothing Change preposition
on
are
decreased Unnecessary verb
apply
while
in
luxury goods and Change preposition
on
travel
transport Add a comma
travel,
are
increased during the time period.
Looking at luxury Unnecessary verb
apply
good
, travel or transport and housing in Fix the agreement mistake
goods
further
details
, it is evident that all the services Fix the agreement mistake
detail
are
gradually increased during 2008. Unnecessary verb
apply
Moreover
, housing accounted for about a third in 2008, which double
luxury goods and travel or transport amount.
Turning to the remaining statistic, the proportion of entertainment, food and clothing Replace the word
doubles
are
dramatically went down between 1958 and 2008. Unnecessary verb
apply
Furthermore
, food consumption sighnificantly
declined from around a third to almost over 10%. Correct your spelling
significantly
While
entertainment and clothing slightly decreased to six per cent and 16% respectively.Submitted by [email protected] on
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