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The table shows the percentage of government spending on education and training and the participation of 18-24 years old in five countries in 2012.

The table shows the percentage of government spending on education and training and the participation of 18-24 years old in five countries in 2012.
The table provides information about the
percent’s
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percentage of
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 government spending on a process teaching and learning skills which
adult
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adults
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 join in
give
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given
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countries
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 during 2012.
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, every country spent more on participation
rate
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,
whereas
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 less spending was seen on expenditure
rate
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.
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,
Poland
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 spent the most on
participation
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the participation
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rate
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,
while
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opposite
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 was true for
Poland
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 in one. In 2012,
Poland
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 spent the most amount of education and training on participation tar at 44%.
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, Slovenia’s proportion stood at 40%. Below
this
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 level of spending in three
countries
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 were Romania (23%), Czech
Requblic
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Republic
 (27%) and Hungary (34%). Turning
on
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 the remaining statistics, it is evident that five
countries
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 spent less on expenditure
rate
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. Slovenia spent 25%
while
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Poland
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 spent one-fifth of Slovenia.
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, the remaining three
countries
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 ranged from 9% to 13%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, rate, poland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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