Some people think that we should invent a new language for international communication. Will the benefits of this weigh the problems associated with it?

In recent years, the problems
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language
in over the world
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important
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an important
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issue
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for every
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and
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government
. To solve
this
problem, we can make a new
language
for
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people
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can use it together.
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drawbacks
of
this
invention. One of the main
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beneficial
aspects of inventing a new
language
is we can connect
countries
together and solve the misunderstanding
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of language
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language
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languages
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in every
countries
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country
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.
This
can be seen that each
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country
has different cultures and we can reduce misunderstandings by creating a new
language
which help us solve
this
issue and
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can
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help everyone can understand together.
As a result
, each
countries
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can be connected and get
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more meaning each other.
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significant advantage of creating a new
language
is we can have lots of opportunities to work anywhere in the world. If we have enough knowledge and
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professionals
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new
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a new
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language
, we can use
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it
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to find a good job easily.
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,
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people who have an understanding
everyone
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of everyone
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by using
language
is more have opportunities
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and
success than
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those
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who do not have enough knowledge about
language
. Some people,
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belives
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that
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the invention
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of
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a new
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language
is do waste of
time
and money and
also
make
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makes
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we
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us
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forget
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the mother
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tounge
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tongue
.
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is because in
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order
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fully of
new
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a new
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language
, we have to study
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the
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time
and money and not anybody
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enough
time
and money to do
this
.
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,
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the
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a
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new
language
for a long
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can make you
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the memorization
about
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of
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your mother tongue.
This
may be true but there
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is
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always going to be a few who disapprove of
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the change
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. In conclusion, the advantages of using
new
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a new
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language
are more than
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the disadvantages
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of
this
.
Therefore
, the writer is no doubt that
new
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a new
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laguage
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language
should be invented for international communication.
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grammar
Revise grammatical errors and enhance sentence structures for clarity. For example, 'the problems about language in over the world are important issue for every citizens' should be 'the problems regarding language around the world are an important issue for every citizen.'
examples
Provide more detailed and specific examples to support your points. For instance, elaborate on how a new language could specifically open up job opportunities or give concrete instances of cultural misunderstandings that could be resolved.
task response
The essay covers the question fully, discussing both the benefits and drawbacks of creating a new language for international communication.
coherence cohesion
Ideas are generally organized well, making it clear what each paragraph is about. The writer successfully highlights both sides of the argument.

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