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the table below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006

the table below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006
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information about the production and
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consumption of Yams in five different parts of the world during 2006. Units are measured in
Kg
 per person and in
million
 tons.
Overall
 , it can be seen that in the consumption of Yam ,
Europe
 was the highest
while
 Africa was the lowest, and in
production
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 of potatoes,
Asia
 was the lowest in
this
 group. Looking at the consumption of potatoes,
Europe
 had the highest
kg
 for each person which had 96.1kg.
Besides
, North
America
 was
a
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slightly lower which was 57.9kg. After
that is
Asia
, South and Central
America
 and Africa which had 25,8kg, 23,6kg and 1,1% respectively. Moving onto the production of potatoes. At
first,
Asia
 was the highest which had 131,2
million
 tons. And after
Asia
,
Europe
 had
the
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 similar which had 126,3
million
. In North
America
, Africa and South and Central
America
, three of them have a big
different
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 with
Europe
 and
Asia
 which have only 24,7,15,4 and 15,6
million
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kg, million, europe, asia, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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