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the table below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006

the table below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006
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information about the production and
the
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consumption of Yams in five different parts of the world during 2006. Units are measured in
Kg
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 per person and in
million
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 tons.
Overall
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 , it can be seen that in the consumption of Yam ,
Europe
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 was the highest
while
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 Africa was the lowest, and in
production
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 of potatoes,
Asia
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 was the lowest in
this
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 group. Looking at the consumption of potatoes,
Europe
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 had the highest
kg
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 for each person which had 96.1kg.
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, North
America
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slightly lower which was 57.9kg. After
that is
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Asia
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, South and Central
America
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 and Africa which had 25,8kg, 23,6kg and 1,1% respectively. Moving onto the production of potatoes. At
first,
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Asia
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 was the highest which had 131,2
million
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 tons. And after
Asia
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,
Europe
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 had
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 similar which had 126,3
million
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. In North
America
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, Africa and South and Central
America
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, three of them have a big
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 with
Europe
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 and
Asia
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 which have only 24,7,15,4 and 15,6
million
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kg, million, europe, asia, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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