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the table below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006

the table below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006
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demonstrated in the tables are statistics on the information about the production and the consumption of potatoes in five different parts of the world during 2006. Units are measured in
Kg
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 per person and in
million
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 tons.
overall
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 , it can be seen that the consumption of potatoes, in Europe was the highest
while
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 in Africa was the lowest, and in the production of potatoes, Asia was the lowest in
this
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 group. beginning with consumption, Europe was the highest with 96,1
kg
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 but Africa was the lowest with 14,1
kg
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 south and central
America
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 and Asia were similar around 25
kg
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 and North
America
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 was the second most with 57,9
kg
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. turning to the remaining statistics , Asia was the highest in production with 131,2
million
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. the second biggest was Europe with 126,3
million
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 . south and Central
America
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 and Africa were similar around 16
million
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 .
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 , North
America
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 was the third biggest with 24,7
million
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