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The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.
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The following bar chart represents the information about
number
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a number
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 of
incidents
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 and injuries
of
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in
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 an unidentified country by five different transportation types: commuter
rail
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, heavy
rail
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, light
rail
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, bus, and demand
respond
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response
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, indicated
cases
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 per 100 million passengers miles travelled or
PMT
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, in 2002.
Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that
rate
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the rate
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 of
incidents
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 and injuries
of travelled
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travelling
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 with commuter
rail
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 was the lowest,
whereas
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 that of those who happened to
founded
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be found
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 in the compared types of transportation in the given timeframe.
However
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, it is interesting to note that the statistics of injured commuters
was
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were
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 fewer than that of the reported
incidents
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 in every
types
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type
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 of travelling means.
To begin
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 with, it is obvious to see that the
demand
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demanded
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respond
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response
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 has the highest number of
incidents
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 at approximately 240
cases
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PMT
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, which was
trippled
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tripled
 that of the light
rail
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 and bus at about 80
cases
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PMT
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. Followed by the heavy
rail
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 and commuter
rail
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 at 50
cases
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PMT
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 and 20
cases
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PMT
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, respectively. In regards
with
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to
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,
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the injuries
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injuries
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injury
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 rate in each type of transportation has
similar
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a similar
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 trend
as
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to
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incident
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the incident
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 rate with a slight
dropped
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drop
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 ranging from 10-50
cases
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PMT
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents, rail, cases, pmt with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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