The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.
The following bar chart represents the information about
number
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a number
the number
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of
incidents
and injuries
of
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in
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an unidentified country by five different transportation types: commuter
rail
, heavy
rail
, light
rail
, bus, and demand
respond
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, indicated
cases
per 100 million passengers miles travelled or
PMT
, in 2002.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that
rate
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the rate
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of
incidents
and injuries
of travelled
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travelling
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with commuter
rail
was the lowest,
whereas
that of those who happened to
founded
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be found
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in the compared types of transportation in the given timeframe.
However
, it is interesting to note that the statistics of injured commuters
was
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were
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fewer than that of the reported
incidents
in every
types
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type
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of travelling means.
To begin
with, it is obvious to see that the
demand
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respond
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response
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has the highest number of
incidents
at approximately 240
cases
PMT
, which was
trippled
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tripled
that of the light
rail
and bus at about 80
cases
PMT
. Followed by the heavy
rail
and commuter
rail
at 50
cases
PMT
and 20
cases
PMT
, respectively. In regards
with
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,
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the injuries
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injuries
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injury
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rate in each type of transportation has
similar
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a similar
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trend
as
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to
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incident
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the incident
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rate with a slight
dropped
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drop
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ranging from 10-50
cases
PMT
.
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