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Some people think that reading is always a good habit , others feel it depends on which books a person is reading . Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #habit #books #person
Many
people
 claim that constantly reading different
books
 is a good habit,
while
 others argue that it should depend on what kind of
books
 they read. In my opinion, reading
ought
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 be maintained as a hobby no matter in what
fields
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field
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. On the one hand, many citizens think that
people
 can gain distinctive knowledge from various
type
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types
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 of
books
, and I agree.
In other words
,
books
 have always been a source for the public to acquire information.
For example
, a person who is interested in history might read history
books
 about different civilizations around the world to get insight into past events.
In addition
, reading materials provide a platform for human beings to explore various topics
in depth
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, allowing readers to choose diverse
content
according to
 their interests and needs, thereby enriching their knowledge and understanding.
Besides
, reviewing
on
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books
 can bring many benefits,
such
 as expanding vocabulary and reducing stress.
On the other hand
, it is often believed that it is better if readers choose their reading
content
 consciously. To make it clear, some publications may convey negative
content
such
 as spreading misinformation or promoting
detremental
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detrimental
 ideologies, which can have harmful effects towards
people
 and
whole
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 society.
For instance
, some magazines may deliberately spread racist or sexist views.
As a result
, the dissemination of
such
 information not only distorts the facts
,
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 but
also
 may contribute to social injustice and hostility.
In addition
, consuming too much poor quality or superficial material is not only a waste of time, but
also
 provides no actual
vaule
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value
.
Therefore
, it is not recommended to browse writings containing
such
content
.
To sum up
,
although
people
 may vary in their opinions, I am convinced that perusing should be promoted as a daily routine as it
create
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 many advantages.
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grammar
Consider proofreading your essay to avoid small errors. For instance, 'ought be' should be 'ought to be' and 'reviewing on books' should be 'reading books.'
task response
Try to add a few more relevant and specific examples to make your arguments more persuasive.
language use
While your ideas are clear, aim for richer vocabulary and more complex sentence structures to improve the overall quality of your writing.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion.
task response
You have provided well-supported main points, like the example about reading history books to gain knowledge about different civilizations.
coherence
The logical structure of your essay is strong, with each paragraph focusing on a specific aspect of the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mental stimulation
  • knowledge acquisition
  • vocabulary expansion
  • stress reduction
  • memory improvement
  • analytical thinking
  • empathy
  • emotional intelligence
  • social cues
  • constructive content
  • morally uplifting
  • misinformation
  • harmful ideologies
  • critical reading skills
  • credible sources
  • inherently good habit
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