the chart below shows what anthropology graudates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. the table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

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The pie chart indicates information about the destinations of Anthropology students after graduation from university, and the table provides data about their salaries after five years of

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, it appears that the

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majority of Anthropology

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are employed at full-time

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, and those who

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in the government sector receive the highest salary. Looking at the

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, it can be seen that 52% of Anthropology

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full-time jobs, which

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more than all of the other types of jobs.

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was followed by part-time

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and unemployed

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, at 15% and 12% respectively.

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at full-time postgrad study and

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at part-time

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and postgrad study were just 5% and 8% respectively.

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, 8% of

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were unknown in

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survey. In terms of salary,

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who were employed in government sections received the highest amount of money, with half of them giving more than 100,000$, followed by freelance constitutions and private companies, with 40% and 30% respectively. Regarding 25,000$ to 49,000, which was the lowest salary, it appears that private companies took a lead, at 10%, twice as much as others.

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the chart below shows what anthropology graudates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. the table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Nowadays, more people move away from their friends and families for work. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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You stayed at your friend’s house when you participated in a business seminar in the other city. You mistakenly left a file with important documents at their house. Write a letter to your friend, describing the file, tell them why it is important. ask him/her to return it to you by post.

In some countries, more and more people are becoming, interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people resarch this?

Social media has replaced the traditional method of communicating and people use more and more of social media to communicate and follow news and events. Do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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