the chart below shows what anthropology graudates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. the table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

the chart below shows what anthropology graudates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. the table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
The pie chart indicates information about the destinations of Anthropology students after graduation from university, and the table provides data about their salaries after five years of
work
.
Overall
, it appears that the
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majority of Anthropology
graduates
are employed at full-time
work
, and those who
work
in the government sector receive the highest salary. Looking at the
detail
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, it can be seen that 52% of Anthropology
graduates
have
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full-time jobs, which
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more than all of the other types of jobs.
This
was followed by part-time
work
and unemployed
graduates
, at 15% and 12% respectively.
Additionally
,
graduates
at full-time postgrad study and
graduates
at part-time
work
and postgrad study were just 5% and 8% respectively.
Finally
, 8% of
graduates
were unknown in
this
survey. In terms of salary,
graduates
who were employed in government sections received the highest amount of money, with half of them giving more than 100,000$, followed by freelance constitutions and private companies, with 40% and 30% respectively. Regarding 25,000$ to 49,000, which was the lowest salary, it appears that private companies took a lead, at 10%, twice as much as others.
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