The graph below shows the reported number of cases of influenza in people over 65 in a certain village in the UK from 1985 to 1995.

The graph below shows the reported number of cases of influenza in people over 65 in a certain village in the UK from 1985 to 1995.
The line graph illustrates the
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of people
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were 65 and
over ages
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in a particular village which was located in the UK between 1985 to 1995.
Overall
, there was a fluctuating trend in the
entired
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entire
time period.
Additionally
, the highest number of people
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flu in the UK, in 1991. As can be seen from the graph, the number of cases increased to 40 from around 55 in the first three years. In the next year, the figures slightly fell around 45. For the following three years, the amount of people who were influenza showed dramatically rose and reached a peak, at nearly 75 in 1991.
On the other hand
, as is shown by the graph, there was a slight decrease in the
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of cases from 1991 to 1993, at about 60.
Conversely
, between 1993 and 1994, the figures increased insignificantly around 65. And the number remained at around 60
at the end
of the period.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reported cases
  • influenza
  • over 65
  • decade
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • seasonal variations
  • fluctuations
  • vaccine availability
  • public health interventions
  • analysis
  • significant
  • population trends
  • data
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