The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart represents the percentages of 7 different jobs, managers,
professionals
, semi-professionals
, tradespeople
, production, clerical and labourers by gender. This
information concerns the population of Australia last
year.
Overall
, it is shown that clerical, labourers, professionals
and semi-professionals
had similar ratios by gender while
managers, tradespeople
and production had significant differences between males and females.
To start with, we can observe that Clerical has the highest percentage of females at almost 1000, while
tradespeople
and production had the lowest at 100. In addition
, most men
were tradespeople
with the percentage reaching 900. on the other hand
, the least men
were labourers with the figure of 400. Moreover
, we can see that tradespeople
had the biggest difference
between men
and women. As for men
's percentage was 900 and women's was 100, as I mentioned above. This
important difference
was 800. Finally
, the smallest difference
was between men
professionals
and women professionals
at 650 and 700 respectively. This
difference
was only 50.Submitted by sssssraf on
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