The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years 2000, 2005 and 2010. The results show the reasons people gave for not going to work. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years 2000, 2005 and 2010. The results show the reasons people gave for not going to work.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates
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a comparison
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between excuses of people for
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absent
in work. The
data
are based on the results of three surveys done in a particular European country in three different years in one decade. The
data
are measured in numbers.
Overall
, illness
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considered as the highest during the given period.
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stress
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is relatively low compared to other reasons. Family responsibilities
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are approximately unchanged during the years . On the one hand , The number of people who used illness as an excuse in 2000 was less than 45 and it
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in 2005 to exactly 40.
In addition
, The figure
cuntinue
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continued
to decline next
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five
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year
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and
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35 in 2010. With regard to stress, there is a slight
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, it start at just over 5 in 2000 .
However
,the figure showed a slight decline in 2005 before shout up in 2010 and
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around 13.
On the other hand
, personal needs experience a gradual increase . It
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at around 14 and
then
it rose to around 20 and 23 in 2005 and 2010 respectively. Family responsibility is
proximetely
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approximately
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the same in the given years at around 27.
In addition
, the initial number of unexpected
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was roughly 7 . It
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in 2005 before fell slightly in 20010 to around 13.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words data with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.

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