The bar chart shows the number of male and female people arrested by type of offence (crime). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The bar chart shows the number of male and female people arrested by type of offence (crime). 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The bar chart displays the percentage of
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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arrested by offence type
by
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2008-2009. The data points out the difference in criminal activities between genders around various categories. Violence against the person , theft and handling stolen goods and criminal damage are the most striking categories,where female
arrests
outnumber male
arrests
.
In particular
, the percentage of female
arrests
for violence against the person stands out, reaching 33%, compared to approximately 31% for males.
This
trend is consistent with theft and handling stolen goods where female
arrests
are up to 30% , meanwhile male 20%.
On the other hand
,criminal damage shows a
slightly
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increase
of
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male
arrests
that embarks 10% and females across 8%. Rubbery and burglary
offences
additionally
show
the
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higher rate of male apprehend, with figures close to 2%-8%,contrasted with females 1%-3%. Drug
offences
as well as
other
offences
emerges
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a slight increase of males apprehend around 8% and approximately 15%,
besides
female
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females
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with 6% and 13%.The discrepancy is less pronounced in other
offences
and fraud and forgery, where male and female arrest rates are closer.
Overall
men will always tend to have higher rates of
arrests
whereas
women tend to have a higher percentage only
at
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violence and theft.
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