Some people believe that children should be brought up in cities. Other believes that countryside offers a better environment for children. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
Children
Use synonyms
is
one of the Change the verb form
are
boon
from Change to a plural noun
boons
deity
and Fix the agreement mistake
deities
parents
are guardians for them during their growing period. Some of them Use synonyms
are thinking
Wrong verb form
think
children
Use synonyms
whose
are Correct pronoun usage
who
fostering
in Wrong verb form
fostered
the
urban areas they are Correct article usage
apply
all
will become Correct determiner usage
apply
most
active and smarter. Other hand Rephrase
more
of
people Change preposition
apply
hopes
the rural Correct subject-verb agreement
hope
area
is most suitable for Use synonyms
children
to live in Use synonyms
a good surroundings
. Correct the article-noun agreement
good surroundings
a good surrounding
This
essay will discuss Linking Words
about
both Remove the preposition
apply
the
views of Correct article usage
apply
this
statement.
Linking Words
Firstly
, nowadays most of the Linking Words
children
are willing to stay in urban Use synonyms
Use synonyms
area
. BecauseFix the agreement mistake
areas
,
there all amenities Remove the comma
apply
available
Add a missing verb
are available
for
them. Change preposition
to
For instance
, playgrounds, entertainment Linking Words
zone
, Fix the agreement mistake
zones
library
and Fix the agreement mistake
libraries
high
education Correct word choice
higher
system
. Fix the agreement mistake
systems
Thus
, most of the Linking Words
parents
and Use synonyms
children
Use synonyms
are having
more Wrong verb form
have
aspirants
to settle in urban areas. Correct your spelling
aspirations
Also
, Linking Words
children
can broaden their Use synonyms
friends
circle, Change to a genitive case
friend's
friends'
it
will a numerous Correct pronoun usage
which
beneficial
to them. Meanwhile, there Replace the word
benefits
is
some demerits Change the verb form
are
also
for the Linking Words
parents
and Use synonyms
children
who are staying in urban places. Use synonyms
For instance
, more population, traffic crisis, Linking Words
high
living cost, Correct word choice
and high
daunting
to monitor Add a missing verb
are daunting
the
Correct article usage
apply
Use synonyms
children
activities.
Change noun form
children's
Secondly
, few of the Linking Words
parents
Use synonyms
are believing
Wrong verb form
believe
to stay
in Change preposition
that staying
rural
place will Correct article usage
a rural
give
Verb problem
provide
the
clean environment and good health for the Correct article usage
a
children
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, Linking Words
rural
Add an article
the rural
a rural
place
will give Fix the agreement mistake
places
the
good atmosphere to Correct article usage
a
children
. Use synonyms
Thus
, the contemplative capacity will Linking Words
be soar
to them. Change the verb form
soar
Also
, the living cost Linking Words
of
rural Change preposition
in
Use synonyms
area
is less than Fix the agreement mistake
areas
urban
Change preposition
in urban
Use synonyms
area
, Fix the agreement mistake
areas
parents
can easily monitor Use synonyms
the
Change the word
their
Use synonyms
children
activities.
Change noun form
children's
Finally
, Linking Words
both
rural and urban areas wherever Change preposition
in both
children
are living their activities should be monitored and controlled by their Use synonyms
parents
. Use synonyms
My
point of view Change preposition
In my
children
are staying Use synonyms
which
places Change preposition
in which
is
not important but they must have dignity and respect.Change the verb form
are
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