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Diagram showing the structur and use of a simple solar panel

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The given process provides information on how the structure
work
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 and
use
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the use
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 of a simple solar
panel
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. What
was
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is
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 notable about the present process which has 2 usages and
structure
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after
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apply
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all
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apply
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. Starting with the structure of the
box
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 with a transparent top. Following, the first way
using
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to use
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 is the solar
panel
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heat
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air
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. And the second approach is the solar
panel
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 to
heat
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water
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. Beginning with the first usage of the solar
panel
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, it places a transparent top which as soon as is built above the
box
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to turn
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 into a complete solar
panel
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. Continuing with, one obvious
ways
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 is the way of
heat
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air
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. At
first,
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the cool
air
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 is flown into the inlet of the solar
panel
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 which
locates
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is located
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 on the left corner of the
box
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. After
that
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 the inlet transports the cool
air
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 into the
box
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 with
transparent
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a transparent
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 top above.
Finally
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, the
air
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is come
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comes
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 outside by outlet. Continuing with another usage of the solar
panel
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,
the
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 way it is used to
heat
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water
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. The
different
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difference
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 between the solar
panel
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 to
heat
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air
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 and
heat
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water
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 is that it has a
water
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 pipe to transport
water
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instead
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 of space
such
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 as
solar
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a solar
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panel
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 to
heat
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air
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. The steps of operating
is
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are
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 the same
with
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as
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 the
heat
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air
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 one but the sun
is increase
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increases
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 the temperature to cause a high
heat
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 which
made
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makes
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water
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is become
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vaporize.
Finally
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, it is come outside by the outlet which is used to transport
water
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 out.

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coherence cohesion
The writing should have a brief introductory sentence that clearly outlines what the diagram and the essay are about.
coherence cohesion
The logical flow of ideas from one sentence to the next could be improved. Each step should connect smoothly to the next to form a clear process.
task achievement
Some parts of the description are unclear or confusing. Make sure to clearly describe each part of the structure and its function in simple terms.
task achievement
While the essay attempts to fully describe the process, some key details and steps are either missing or inaccurately described, such as the heating process for water resulting in vaporization.
task achievement
The essay attempts to cover all aspects of the diagram, including both uses of the solar panel.
task achievement
The main points of the process have been outlined, showing an understanding of the solar panel’s structure and usage.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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