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Diagram showing the structur and use of a simple solar panel

#structur #panel
The given process provides information on how the structure
work
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works
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 and
use
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the use
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 of a simple solar
panel
. What
was
Wrong verb form
is
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 notable about the present process which has 2 usages and
structure
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structures
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after
Change preposition
apply
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all
Correct determiner usage
apply
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. Starting with the structure of the
box
 with a transparent top. Following, the first way
using
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 is the solar
panel
heat
air
. And the second approach is the solar
panel
 to
heat
water
. Beginning with the first usage of the solar
panel
, it places a transparent top which as soon as is built above the
box
to turn
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 into a complete solar
panel
. Continuing with, one obvious
ways
Change to a singular noun
way
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 is the way of
heat
air
. At
first,
the cool
air
 is flown into the inlet of the solar
panel
 which
locates
Wrong verb form
is located
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 on the left corner of the
box
. After
that
Add a comma
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 the inlet transports the cool
air
 into the
box
 with
transparent
Correct article usage
a transparent
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 top above.
Finally
, the
air
is come
Wrong verb form
comes
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 outside by outlet. Continuing with another usage of the solar
panel
,
the
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 way it is used to
heat
water
. The
different
Replace the word
difference
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 between the solar
panel
 to
heat
air
 and
heat
water
 is that it has a
water
 pipe to transport
water
instead
 of space
such
 as
solar
Correct article usage
a solar
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panel
 to
heat
air
. The steps of operating
is
Change the verb form
are
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 the same
with
Change preposition
as
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 the
heat
air
 one but the sun
is increase
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increases
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 the temperature to cause a high
heat
 which
made
Wrong verb form
makes
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water
is become
Verb problem
apply
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vaporize.
Finally
, it is come outside by the outlet which is used to transport
water
 out.

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coherence cohesion
The writing should have a brief introductory sentence that clearly outlines what the diagram and the essay are about.
coherence cohesion
The logical flow of ideas from one sentence to the next could be improved. Each step should connect smoothly to the next to form a clear process.
task achievement
Some parts of the description are unclear or confusing. Make sure to clearly describe each part of the structure and its function in simple terms.
task achievement
While the essay attempts to fully describe the process, some key details and steps are either missing or inaccurately described, such as the heating process for water resulting in vaporization.
task achievement
The essay attempts to cover all aspects of the diagram, including both uses of the solar panel.
task achievement
The main points of the process have been outlined, showing an understanding of the solar panel’s structure and usage.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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