The graph shows the percentage of people who use mobile phones in four situations, grouped by four age groups.

The graph shows the percentage of people who use mobile phones in four situations, grouped by four age groups.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The provided bar chart reveals the proportion of mobile phone users being over 18 in different contexts. Information is divided into four
age
categories.
Overall
, the most frequent use of cell
phones
belongs to the youngest
age
group
while
the reverse is true for
people
in the oldest
age
group. Family dinner is the time during which the smallest percentage of phone users is recorded. The percentages of those who are on their
phones
while
using public transport and in restaurants decline consistently with
age
. Particularly, nine out of ten
people
aged 18-29
traveling
Change the spelling
travelling
show examples
by mass transportation use mobiles
while
decreases of exactly 10%, 20%, and 35% are witnessed in the remaining three
age
groups (30-49, 50-64, and 65+, respectively). Interestingly, the chart
also
shows an identical trend for
people
using
phones
in restaurants with the figures being 50%, 40%, 30%, and 15% for four
age
groups in ascending order. Meanwhile, the proportion of phone users on the street is similar for all groups at around 80%. Nearly a fifth of the youngest
people
observed use their
phones
during family
dinner
Fix the agreement mistake
dinners
show examples
compared to only around 10% in those ages 30 to over 65.
Submitted by Nghỉ hè vui vẻ cả nhà on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, phones, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: