Some people believe that advertisements are useful for viewers, while others think that they are misleading and can't be trusted. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Advertisement is a kind of marketing which works as
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developing
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discuss different
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about
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advertisements
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. Even though advertising is a huge
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, many companies are using it as the only way of marketing types. It is
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businesses
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corporates
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and services will be
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bought
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or used. It is a fantastic method to gain a large level of clients. The great aspect
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advertising is that they can choose a specific type of
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clients
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products are directed
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they direct it to children, and
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they will make it
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desirable for the kids so they can insist to their parents to buy the toy.
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, some
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the exaggeration in the ad. Some advertising employees may exaggerate
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in order to make the viewer believe and get convinced of what they sow.
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, the photos are amazing and the view of the room can be fascinating but when it comes to
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reality they may choose
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where they cover some of the flaws in the room.
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kind of advertising should be banished. Anyway, in my
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I think that advertising is a great method of growing a small business or a big
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as long as it is used with good manners and truthful
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subtracting
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topic. Advertising is the secret of every successful business. In conclusion, advertising is a type of marketing which is used to make
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item or a surface more popular. People have
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various
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about advertising. Some people
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advertising and think that it
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can be used in a
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misleading
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way.
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others
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it is totally useful if it is used and presented with dignity. In my
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opinion
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I think it is a perfect way of gaining more clients.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumer awareness
  • Economic activity
  • Consumer spending
  • Job creation
  • Exaggerated claims
  • Deceptive tactics
  • Unrealistic expectations
  • Overconsumption
  • Materialism
  • Vulnerable populations
  • Media literacy
  • Social and psychological effects
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