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The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of inhabitants in four Asian nations living in urban areas between 1970 and 2020.
In addition
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 to the forecast from 2030 to 2040.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there was an upward trend in the percentages of citizens in all countries, but the
Philippines
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 had slightly decreased. Having looked at the line graph more closely, we can see that in 1970, the
Philippines
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 was the highest at about 31% and
Malaysia
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 was the second at 30%. After that was
Thailand
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 at nearly 20%,
while
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Indonesia
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 had the lowest proportion at nearly 13%. In the next 10 years, all countries had a slight rise and
Malaysia
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 took the first place at 40%. In 1990 the
Philippines
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 climbed to the top at nearly 50% and
Indonesia
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 still had the lowest percentage at 21%. After a decade,
Malaysia
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 has sharply jumped to 60%
while
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 the
Philippines
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 slightly went down around 3%.
On the other hand
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, both
Thailand
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 and
Indonesia
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 were at similar levels at approximately 30%.
According to
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 2010,
Indonesia
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 significantly increased to 40%
while
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 the
Philippines
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 slightly dropped to 40%. In 2020, all nations rose and
Malaysia
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 was still the highest
while
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Thailand
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 was the lowest. In the future, from 2030 to 2040, it is projected that all countries will grow, and
Malaysia
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 will reach a peak of 80%.
Moreover
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,
Indonesia
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 will have a substantial increase to 60% and take the second top.
Additionally
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, the
Philippines
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 will be the third and
Thailand
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 will still have the lowest proportion of residents.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words philippines, malaysia, thailand, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 4 times.
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