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The charts below show the proportion of Vietnam students who cheat on exams and their preferred method of cheating in 2014

The charts below show the proportion of Vietnam students who cheat on exams and their preferred method of cheating in 2014
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given
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bar
chart
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 shows the percentage of Vietnamese pupils who cheated on exams.
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,the
given
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pie
chart
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 illustrates the methods which were popular for helping them cheat
Overall
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,it can be seen clearly that the
percent
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 of male cheaters was always higher than females.
Additionally
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,
cheat
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a cheat
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 sheet was the most preferred method of betraying in 2014.
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 with the bar
chart
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.In primary school,the figure for
boyswas
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boys was
 over 2 times as many as girls students with 9% for girls and 24% for boys.
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, the secondary school
had
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the gap between the proportion of 2 sex
cheater
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cheaters
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 was narrower
which
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stood
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 at 45% of males and 30% of females.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore
, university pupils
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who
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cheated most
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among
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in
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 3 schools
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with
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over 50% in
man
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male
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 cheaters and 45% in woman cheaters. Turning to the pie
chart
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 where the students
were prefer
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 using cheat
sheet
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sheets
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 most
with
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45%.The second highest figure was peeking at someone who sat near them,with 35%.
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, the least
in
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popular were the pupils
gave
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who gave
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 money to their teachers to help them during exams and hacking the answer key which
were
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 similar to each figure
had
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15% and 10%,respectively.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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