The maps show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now and plans for its development.

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The two maps illustrate the Southside shopping mall at present and how it will change in the future.

Overall

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, the plan would undergo some changes to include different facilities.

In addition

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, it can be seen that the golf course and

park

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will make way for department store development

while

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the car

park

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will get bigger. Currently, there is an entertaining area, a noodle shop and a cinema in the northeast of the mall. The building

also

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contains a cafe, a supermarket, a toilet and a department store.

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, the shopping complex is surrounded by a car

park

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, a fitness centre and a green area. In the future, the infrastructure towards the north swing will be converted into a beauty salon and other four stores.

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, the cafe is likely turned into an information office and some fashion stores will be added next to the supermarket.

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, the green space is planned to be demolished for new department store expansion. Another extension will be made to the car

park

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while

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the fitness centre will no longer exist.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

176 words

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The maps show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now and plans for its development.

In many countries around the world, it is common for families to run their own business. Some people think that keeping the business within the family is the best approach while other believe this could lead to problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In some parts of the world , many famous people are regarded as 'role models' and they are having an increasing on the youth Is that a positive or negative developments

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

More and more people are buying fashionable clothes these days. Does it have more negative or positive effects? Give reasons for your answers and include examples relevant to your experience.