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The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph depicts the
propotion
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proportion
promotion
 of four different recycling materials
such
 as
paper
 and
cardboard
, glass containers,
aluminium
 cans and
plastics
 that were recycled in the
period
 from 1982 to 2010.
According to
 the data, in
the
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apply
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1982 year
paper
 &
cardboard
 and glass containers started at 65% and 50% respectively,
whereas
aluminium
 started
recycling
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the recycling
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 process only
since
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in
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 1986 year and
plastics
 even 4 years later. The most recycled products were
paper
 and
cardboard
 for the whole
period
,
while
plastics
 had the lowest percentage. The graph illustrates that
materials
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the materials
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 that had only the positive growth were
plastics
 and
aluminium
 cans,
this products
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this product
these products
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 rose from 2% and 5% to 9% and 45% respectively. The other materials had periods when their percentage slowly went down in different periods of time. Glass
containers
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container
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 recycling
felt
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fell
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 down
at
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by
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 40%
by
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over
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 8 years. The same situation was with
paper
 and
cardboard
 in
period
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the period
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 from 1986 to 1990 and
then
 4 years later
happend
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happened
happen
 again till the end of
specified
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the specified
a specified
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period
.
To sum up
, all types of recycling products
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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 didn't change at all except
aluminium
 cans
that
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which
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 increased their
percent
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percentage
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 almost
in
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apply
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5 times since the
begining
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beginning
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, cardboard, aluminium, plastics, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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