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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, many schools see
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 as a more important subject than local
languages
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. In
this
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 essay, we will discuss why students should learn
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 more often and reasons to do it reversely. From my point of view, learning
English
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 more often is partly true and opens many opportunities for the students. Students will have a chance to study from any place in the world, travel, and change their experiences with others; because
English
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 the most used language.
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look at my native language
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 as Ukrainian, we will see that the only place where you can speak with someone in
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 language is Ukraine.
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, we have our local
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 and I completely agree that we should learn them but it depends on what needs you need it. We know that people can easily understand each other in their local
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, express their emotions, etc. Let's take an example, you went somewhere on vacation to another country and you were lost without any knowledge of
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. As I see it,
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 is not what you wanted from your vacation.
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, we discussed many pros of learning
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 but I want
to sum up
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, that our local
languages
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 are
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 as important as
English
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 and we should not forget about their learning.

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coherence cohesion
Your essay needs a clearer structure with distinct paragraphs for the introduction, body, and conclusion. Begin each paragraph with a clear topic sentence to guide the reader.
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Provide more specific supporting examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, mention specific situations where knowing English has significantly benefited individuals or describe local language initiatives.
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Ensure that your ideas are fully developed. Instead of merely stating that local languages are important, explain why they are crucial for cultural preservation and identity.
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Your essay has a clear opinion on the importance of both English and local languages, which is a good starting point for a balanced discussion.
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You effectively recognized the benefits of learning English, such as global opportunities and the ability to communicate widely.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion touches on the need to balance learning English and local languages, which is a thoughtful and nuanced view.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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