The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples.

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is,always considered by many, a precious gift to all of us. In

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day and age,

people

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's average

health

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standard is supposed to be decreasing in the coming days as compared to now. I strongly support

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notion and

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essay will discuss why the average standard of

people

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health

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is likely to be lower in the future than it is now with relevant reasons and illustrations.

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aging

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the aging

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population and chronic diseases are the result of

sedentary

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the sedentary

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lifestyle adopted by the

people

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, it directly affects the physical

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, more and more

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are prone to obesity. They adopted poor dietary habits, which have

negative

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impact on their

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, technological advancements

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also

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contributing to

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serious concern. With the advancement of technology,

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are becoming lethargic. Ultimately,

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outcome

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are not positive, as concerned with their

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. To add on, environmental pollution has

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impact on the standard of

people

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health

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. Some industries release chemicals into the air, which cause harm to the ozone layer that shields us from UV radiation.

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over population

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overpopulation

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is one of the primary reasons for

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massive environmental pollution.

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, poor lifestyle, advanced technology and environmental pollution have detrimental impacts on the average standard of

people

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health

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, which means

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lower it in the future than in the present.

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grammar

Try to reduce any grammatical errors such as 'Health is, always considered' which should be 'Health is always considered'.

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Make sure to proofread for punctuation errors, for example, 'With the advancement of technology', would be clearer without the comma.

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Include more specific examples to strengthen your arguments.

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Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to enhance clarity.

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Clear introduction and conclusion.

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Good attempt at providing reasons and illustrations for the viewpoint.

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Generally coherent and follows a logical structure.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

222 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

1. Standard of health
2. Average
3. Lower
4. Future
5. Aging population
6. Chronic diseases
7. Sedentary lifestyle
8. Lack of exercise
9. Poor dietary habits
10. Environmental pollution
11. Technological advancements
12. Impact on health

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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples.

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