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The map below show the development of an area before and after the builiding of a hydroelectric dam.

The map below show the development of an area before and after the builiding of a hydroelectric dam.
The two maps illustrate the changes in a particular area from 1980 to 2000.
Overall
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, it is evident that some natural creatures were cleared.
On the other hand
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, the river witnessed an increase in its size. In 1980, a river flew along
this
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 area from the north to the south, both sides of which
laid
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lay
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 a few scattered mountains.
Moreover
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, there were some rare plants and species on the left side,
coupled with
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 an ancient building
locating
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located
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 in a forest. On the other side of the flow, there was
also
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 an irrigated farmland next to a village. Over the next 20 years, the agricultural area, the historical site and the forest were all removed for the expansion of the river section. It
then
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 became a lake for fishing and boating.
Furthermore
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, a hydroelectric dam and 4 electrical towers were constructed at the southernmost tip of the lake.
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, the village had relocated to
further
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 south,
made
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and made
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 way for the hotel.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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