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coherence cohesion
Your letter lacks a clear and logical structure. Consider organizing your thoughts more coherently into paragraphs that each explore different aspects of your message.
coherence cohesion
The greeting 'Dear Hung' is appropriate, but the closing 'Love you Hung' could be seen as too casual, especially considering the unusual nature of your request. Consider a more balanced closing.
task achievement
You need to address the main purpose of your letter more clearly and suitably. The topic you've chosen to discuss is very personal and might not be appropriate for a letter format. Reflect on the tone and appropriateness of the content.
task achievement
Your request might come across as insensitive and awkward. Consider expressing your thoughts in a more thoughtful and considerate manner.
task achievement
You have made an effort to communicate your feelings and reached out to your friend, which shows your willingness to connect.
coherence cohesion
Your letter includes a greeting and a closing, framing your letter in a conventional format.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.
In recent years, many countries have had a chance to improve the level of life through economic advancement. New sources of income might be harmful to society at the same time. It is agreed, the actions, that might be considered improper, are worth it, when it comes to the country’s economy. Analyzing the chance to decrease the amount of lower class, as well as an opportunity to advance the technology breakthrough in the global market will prove it.
A portion of society believes that children must do educational activities in their leisure time instead of wasting time on unproductive activities. I am totally disagree with this statement. I will give the reasons and example in upcoming paragraphs.
The constructive method of evaluating pupils' performance should also include coursework and projects. However, some believe that formal examinations are the only method of analyzing their knowledge. In my opinion, other methods of assessing the student's performance should be involved, and I disagree with the above notion.
The transition from school to university presents a formidable challenge for many students. This essay will explain why this is the case and then suggest several measures to overcome these difficulties.
I hope you are doing well. I am glad that you have taken the decision finally, as you know driving is a very crucial skill in day-to-day life. It will make your life easier and comfortable, it will help you to commute easily from your house to college and from college to your workplace.