IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

The local council has some funds to invest in the neighborhood. They have asked for suggestions from the public. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter • thank them for considering the public’s opinion • explain ways in which the funds can be utilised • offer some ways in which you can contribute to the council You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to offer feedback and suggest some funds to invest in the
neighnorhood
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neighbourhood
. I thank them for considering the public opinion.
Although
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 I appreciate the ways in which the funds can be utilised, there are
community
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 events,
such
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 as clean-up days and festivals, to improve
community
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 spirit and cleanliness.
Besides
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this
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, propose creating more green spaces, like parks and
community
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 gardens to enhance the environment and provide leisure activities for residents.
Moreover
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, I recommend investing in local facilities
such
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 as libraries or
sport
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sports
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centers
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, to promote education and health among
community
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 members. Rather than waiting for complaints to escalate, I suggest you
to
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apply
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offer to volunteer for events or projects that the council organizes to show support and
hel
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help
 build a stronger
community
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. Where the library has
serves
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 our
community
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 well, some upgrades are necessary to meet current needs. Thank you for considering my suggestions, I look forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Lisa.

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greeting and closing
Make sure to include a clear greeting and closing. Use formal language like 'Dear Sir or Madam' and 'Yours faithfully' for a better tone.
single idea per paragraph
Try to separate each idea into its own paragraph to make it clearer. Each point should be easy to find and understand.
complete response
Make sure that every suggestion you give is fully explained. This helps show how the funds can be used effectively.
suitable writing tone
Your letter has a polite tone and thanks the council, which is great.
complete response
You provided good suggestions for community improvement, like parks and libraries.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • thank
  • public
  • suggest
  • funds
  • improve
  • community
  • events
  • spaces
  • parks
  • gardens
  • facilities
  • libraries
  • sports
  • volunteer
  • projects
  • residents
  • spirit
  • cleanliness
  • education
  • health
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