Some people feel that it is always wrong to keep animals in captivity, for instance in zoos. What do you think the adventages and disadvantages from this?,

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of confining

animals

,

for instance

in

zoos

, is argued by some people to be inherently unethical.

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it is contended by others that there are benefits both for

animals

and for humans.

While

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issue, it is believed, would bring some possible disadvantages, it will

also

bring several advantages that I will explain in

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essay. Regarding the drawback

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this

issue,

zoos

are the unnatural way in which

animals

live in

such

places.

For example

, captive

animals

do not need to hunt or raise offspring, and

this

means that they are not living as nature intended.

Furthermore

,

animals

probably suffer mentally when kept in captivity, even if their surroundings are spacious and similar to

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natural

habitat

. Symptoms of mental issues range from repetitive behaviour to eating disorders, and these are often seen in captive

animals

.

Lastly

, it is often said that

zoos

add little to animal conservation, which is better served by preserving their

habitat

.

Conversely

, one of the benefits is that in most cases they offer a secure and peaceful setting for

animals

,

for example

in

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wildlife parks or reserves. It is seen that in many cases, the

animals

would suffer from loss of

habitat

or poaching in the wild, and in captivity they are at least safe and able to breed successfully.

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,

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zoos

and animal parks are part of an integrated system of protecting

animals

, involving

habitat

protection, breeding programmes and disease control.

This

all helps to safeguard endangered species and

thus

preserve the global ecosystem for the future benefit of all life forms.

Overall

, the lack of

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measurability from

this

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substantial

drawback that should be taken to help

animals

to

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their unnatural ways.

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the

positive

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from

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captivity may

protect to

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safe

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and

peaceful

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of

animals

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life

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should be not forgotten as well.