Some scientist thinks that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous, Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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scientists
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think
culture
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life
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lifestyles
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be
the
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planet
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planets
need
to communicate with them and Correct article usage
the need
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ideas will give a good Wrong verb form
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. Whereas others
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Others
are opposing
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oppose
this
point because it is possible to give a negative result
on the earth
. This
essay is going to discuss about
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both views of the Remove the article
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scientists
.
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earth
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the earth
part
of the solar system, because all species can survive only Change to a plural noun
parts
this
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on this
planet
. Moreover
, all countries in
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on
this
planet
are developing their space research center
. Change the spelling
centre
Hence
, scientists
are endeavoring
to communicate with the other Change the spelling
endeavouring
planet
whether there is any possibility to contact with
any alien Change preposition
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the
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other
planet
. However
, if scientists
will
bring any alien lifestyle, it might Verb problem
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give
a good impact on Verb problem
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sector
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sectors
also
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the chance
the
job scarcity.
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the other hand, Change preposition
On
this
idea is possible to give some negative results and this
is an undeniable argument. Furthermore
, all time
alien Add a hyphen
all-time
culture
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cultures
lifestyle
will not give a good Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
result
on the
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earth
. Sometimes any huge disaster is possible to happen in
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on
the
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earth
by the
sharing information Correct article usage
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to
another Change preposition
with
planet
. Additionally
, there is no one can’t to
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an
alien is Correct word choice
whether an
a
right person to share the information and Correct article usage
the
their
habitual activities will not give a good Correct word choice
whether their
result
.
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my opinion, Change preposition
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scientists
sharing the
information Correct article usage
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to
other Change preposition
with
planet
is a welcome idea. Whilst, there is a protocol Fix the agreement mistake
planets
should
be required in that way Correct pronoun usage
that should
scientists
will implement their actions.Submitted by smsundaram57 on
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task achievement
Great effort in presenting both sides of the argument. To improve, focus on organizing your ideas in well-structured paragraphs with clear topic sentences and supporting details.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction is clear, but try to make it a bit more concise. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea or aspect.
task achievement
Use more specific examples to illustrate your points. For instance, mention particular scientific theories or potential risks in a more detailed manner.
coherence cohesion
Improve your transitions between ideas and paragraphs to make the essay easier to follow. Use linking words and phrases to help guide the reader through your argument.
task achievement
You addressed both viewpoints clearly.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion provides a clear stance on the issue.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example